My father walks softly,
As if he must tread carefully,
Always carefully,
Lest he steps too hard
And crushes the world under his feet.
The stride of someone who knows
To tread lightly,
Because there are others below him.
My brother walks erratically,
Sometimes at a creeping and slow run,
Other times at an unnecessarily fast crawl,
And sometimes with steps like a small giant,
Merely because he can.
As if he knows that life is too short
To walk the same way twice.
My mother walks gracefully
Like a doe through the woods.
Yet at the same time, she marches,
A proud, elegant march,
As if to say,
I have never been to France,
But I dance as beautifully as any French ballerina.
I walk silently,
Never making a sound,
Just because I know that the sounds
Of feet against floor are unnecessary,
And so, must be avoided.
But every now and then,
I take the stairs slowly,
Letting them groan under my weight.
Just to remind myself, that sometimes,
Its not so bad to be unnecessary.















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That's how I walk.
Tiptoes.
Stealthily yet noisily.
Happy. Energetic.
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*Maximum-Ride-Fans
Cheer up and dry your damp eyes and tell me when it rains
And I'll blend up that rainbow above you and shoot it through your veins
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I went mad, of course. But I got bored with that after a while, and went sane.
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*Maximum-Ride-Fans
Cheer up and dry your damp eyes and tell me when it rains
And I'll blend up that rainbow above you and shoot it through your veins
I walk with a straight back always, a dancer's posture, unless I am imitating someone else. (Like a ghetto-homey-from-the-hood.) Sometimes I walk on my tippytoes, and often I find myself skipping, because I like to feel like I'm floating. Sometimes I glide. Same reason. It's tied in to my dancing. I would prefer to dance everywhere. Literally waltz into a room. =]
This piece I really really really like. Two critical comments - in the first stanza did you mean 'lest' instead of 'less'? And in the second you used the word 'creep' in two consecutive lines, and I'd imagine a creeping slow run, and a fast creep to be about the same pace. Perhaps change one of them.
But that's really nitpicking. Flow, whimsey, everything else: great.
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I used to be forgetful, then I forgot how to.
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I went mad, of course. But I got bored with that after a while, and went sane.
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I used to be forgetful, then I forgot how to.
Come to think of it.. I walk silently D:
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You won't understand what others understand if you believe they don't understand what you understand. Period.
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I went mad, of course. But I got bored with that after a while, and went sane.
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